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An increasing number of people are changing their careers. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

With a change for various lifestyles, more and more people are changing their
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 some insist that it is not beneficial to keep working in the same field, I would argue that various works
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 has a positive effect. Admittedly, there are some disadvantages to changing their
job
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. Some people may waste their time and money if they do not their best to seek different jobs. It is true that experiencing different work needs to make efforts.
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, it is essential to set their goals before starting a change. If they cannot consistently maintain their motivation, it causes worse performances.
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, some people may find it difficult to build a solid finance.
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, I still believe that changing work can bring about positive consequence. Some people cannot be satisfied with current
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 is because there are more many kinds of jobs than in the past since many industries have developed.
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, some people can want to
experience
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 different types of jobs.
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, some people believe that various
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 leads them to suitable occupation.
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, some companies require some certification and prefer competent candidates. Various
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 enables them to learn many things.
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, the challenge for their career helps them to obtain a better
job
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. In conclusion, I understand the negative effect of changing
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 as financial problems and wasting time.
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, according to the aforementioned
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 as high satisfaction
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, I still believe that
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 should be seen as a positive development.

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