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Some people believe that our personalities are predetermined as a result of our genes before we are born and there is nothing that can be done to alter our character traits.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people hold that our character traits are predefined through heredity before birth, so, changing them is simply out of the question. I do not completely agree with
this
 notion because | believe genetic makeup is not the only determinant of human personalities. Together with heredity, there are other shapers of personalities, including culture and education. Specifically, cultural values affect the way people behave under certain circumstances while education acts as a foundation on which people build and develop their own set of personal traits. In certain contexts, the interaction between genetics and these factors might make a person alter his/her
personality
.
For example
, a person might be genetically predisposed to being shy and simple-minded, but living in a highly-interactive and well-educated community,
such
 as in a cosmopolitan city, might lead him to be more confident and intelligent. In general, cultural and educational environments are the real keys to the
personality
 change. Of course, the role of genes in the development of
personality
 is undeniable. Many research findings suggest that most genetic traits that we have are emotional patterns,
that is
 natural states that hardly changes throughout one's lifetime.
For example
, some people are naturally more fearful than others and even when they reach adulthood, they still have phobias and tend to avoid scary things,
such
 as horror movies.
However
, as mentioned above, genes are not the only crucial factor in forming
personality
;
therefore
, it is unlikely that inherited personalities will remain fixed and stable throughout one's life. In conclusion,
although
 genetic makeup has an immense influence on the development of personalities,
this
 is not a sound reason to argue that our character traits will never change.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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