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Write a letter to an electronic company requesting information about their latest model of digital camera you have seen advertised. Ask about the following items The price and availability of the new camera The exact size and special functions the set have

#company #information #model #camera #items #price #availability #size #functions
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to seek some information regarding the updated version of the digital
camera
 that you have advertised on your company's official website. I am a regular customer of your company and a photographer by profession. I appreciate the quality of services delivered by your firm to your customers.
Although
 I have a wide range of cameras which I purchased from your online store, I am looking for another
camera
 with advanced features. After watching your advertisement, I am interested in purchasing the latest model of Sony Erikson S16
camera
, but, before making a purchase, I have some
quiries
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item. I would like to know the exact price
along with
 the mode of payment.
Moreover
, is it available at your store or do I have to wait? If yes, how many days it will take to deliver to my address?
Besides
 the price and availability, kindly enlighten me about the specific functions of
this
 new
camera
. It seems that it has a compatible size;
however
, I would like to know the exact dimensions of it. I am looking forward to seeking the above-mentioned information at my e-mail [email protected]. I am eagerly waiting for your reply. Yours faithfully, Amandeep Kaur
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task achievement
Great job on clearly stating your purpose for writing! However, ensure that all your queries are clearly and distinctly stated. For instance, instead of asking about the price, mode of payment, and availability all in one sentence, consider separating them to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Your letter has a good logical structure. Still, be mindful of minor spelling errors such as 'queries' instead of 'quiries'. Proofreading your letter can help catch these small mistakes.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriate and polite, fitting the formal nature of the letter.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is suitable and polite, addressing the recipient with respect.

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