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Many people belive that in order to have clean and tidy streets in their neighbourhood while other think it should be government duty what is your opinion?

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Since, hygienic
environment
 around us is most essential.
Although
 some masses ponder that it is accountability one and only to residents rather than state to keep the
environment
 tidy.Here, I consider that both have a responsibility for a healthy
environment
.
First
 and foremost, why people clean their street individual level because they are affected by unhealthy and polluted
environment
otherwise
 multifarious diseases spread in that
area
.
For instance
, If people throw garbage and waste material of kitchen directly and indirectly in the neighbourhood,
thus epedemic
Suggestion
thus epidemics
thus epidemic
a thus epidemic
the thus epidemic
 of dengue outbreak from hideous garbage so if society wants to deter it they should require to cleanliness while mopping in the house.In ruler
area
, a lot of people live in the filthy
area
. Pursuing
further
this
, According to point of view those people who advocate that they play reasonable taxes to states for road so, masses should leverages in returns from government.They suggest that the government should allocate staff member for cleanliness.Another way, the ministry
also establish
Suggestion
also establishes
is also establishing
has also established
 some seminars to the community related to
environment
Suggestion
the environment
 so they should be aware about them and parents
also
 provide information to children because it is our fundamental duties to reduce the detrimental effect which are occurring by untidy
environment
.
In addition
, elected union member has a main responsibility to clean filthy roads. To recapitulate, after all things, while keeping in mind that the famous saying"cleanliness is godliness".After I acknowledged that
Moreover all
Accept comma addition
Moreover, all
 the inhabitants have responsible for unhealthy
environment
 because they should be affected mostly in that
area
 no one other.
Nevertheless
, the government
also take
Suggestion
also takes
has also taken
further
 step to mitigate problem related to
environment
Suggestion
the environment
 which are suffered by residents.So ultimately back offs
such
 a problem.
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