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Some people say that modern innovations bring a lot more problems than benefits? Do you agree or disagree?

#people #innovations
Since, recent times are witnessing that people rely on modern discoveries at a considerable level, handful of people argue that it has created more problems than its advantages.
However
, I largely disagree with
above statement
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the above statement
 owing to various reasons.
To begin
 with, modern innovations
has made
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have made
 the things simpler and easier to be done. With the advancement in technology and
internet
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the internet
,
Accept space
,
 some sectors
such
 as e-commerce is being preferred by people considering that it saves their significant time and energy. Why would people wander in markets when a single mouse click enables them to buy
desired products
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the desired products
 with attractive discounts.? What’s more is,
popularity
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the popularity
 of e-commerce creates multitude job opportunities along with the benefits of low building and infrastructure costs for sellers.
In addition
, latest innovations in health sector made the complex surgeries more successful and easier which
further
 lead to better health services.
Moreover
, discoveries of robotics made several home and office tasks Very easy.
For instance
, during pandemic COVID-19, various
hospitals shops
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hospitals, shops
 use robotics to deliver required things to the patients. Shops
also
 use robots to deliver things to customers. People who think innovations as problematic argue that some people become overdependent on modern techniques.
Moreover
, some people
wastes
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waste
 their considerable time by playing games and using social media apps
such
 as Facebook. To conclude,
although
 modern innovations have some demerits, its benefits are proving as a boon to mankind. Its limitations can be eradicated with wisdom and awareness so that
best
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the best
 of the discoveries could be gained.
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