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Some people say that modern innovations bring a lot more problems than benefits? Do you agree or disagree?

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Since, recent times are witnessing that people rely on modern discoveries at a considerable level, handful of people argue that it has created more problems than its advantages.
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, I largely disagree with
above statement
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the above statement
 owing to various reasons.
To begin
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 with, modern innovations
has made
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have made
 the things simpler and easier to be done. With the advancement in technology and
internet
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the internet
,
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,
 some sectors
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 as e-commerce is being preferred by people considering that it saves their significant time and energy. Why would people wander in markets when a single mouse click enables them to buy
desired products
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the desired products
 with attractive discounts.? What’s more is,
popularity
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the popularity
 of e-commerce creates multitude job opportunities along with the benefits of low building and infrastructure costs for sellers.
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, latest innovations in health sector made the complex surgeries more successful and easier which
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 lead to better health services.
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, discoveries of robotics made several home and office tasks Very easy.
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, during pandemic COVID-19, various
hospitals shops
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hospitals, shops
 use robotics to deliver required things to the patients. Shops
also
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 use robots to deliver things to customers. People who think innovations as problematic argue that some people become overdependent on modern techniques.
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, some people
wastes
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waste
 their considerable time by playing games and using social media apps
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 as Facebook. To conclude,
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 modern innovations have some demerits, its benefits are proving as a boon to mankind. Its limitations can be eradicated with wisdom and awareness so that
best
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the best
 of the discoveries could be gained.
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