Nowadays more and more older people who are looking for work have to compete with younger people for the same jobs. What problem does this cause? What are some possible solutions?

These days, many old people who are desperately seeking for jobs,
unfortunately have
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unfortunately, have
to contest with younger
genrations
all the people living at the same time or of approximately the same age
generations
generation
for
same position
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the same position
in a company. While
this
situation leads to many problems which might impact the life of older generations. There are,
however
, several possible steps which can be taken to overcome
this
worriment
. One of the major problem that comes as a hurdle in job hunting for old people is education qualification.
Althought
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Although
these people
carries
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carry
a lot of experience on their
back but
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back, but
the younger generation,
on the other hand
, carries latest education skills which are essential in the market.
For instance
, in technology industries which are getting indulged with other occupations as well, has a requirement for people only with
latest knowledge
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the latest knowledge
of the advance systems and softwares, which many youngsters get
chance
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a chance
the chance
to learn at
college level
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the college level
a college level
. Another thing that worries a lot of
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
job seekers is that many companies believe that these people lacks to develop new innovative ideas. As many occupations,
for example
, are moving towards the goal of
advancement
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advancing
in living standards, they prefer younger minds;
which according
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which, according
to them tend to develop new ideas and concepts in the market. As a consequence, many of these age groups people are often neglected for a job.
Nevertheless
, on a positive note, there are some solutions to it.
Firstly
, it should be the responsibility of the government to keep
the older
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older
people up to date as per
market standards
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the market standards
.
This
can be done in several ways, one of which could be to provide classes on latest equipments and softwares.
Furthermore
, they can be awarded with the certifications of these training, which can be shown in their resumes while looking for jobs. Another possible step is that, companies can pair these old staff with younger ones in some projects, through which elder ones can develop thought ideas. To sum up all, older people are finding hard to achieve the standards of the vacancies and
in contrast
younger people are filling up these jobs. With proper measures by both companies and the government,
this
problem can be solved.
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