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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why is it happening?What can the government do to reduce the amount of rubbish produced.

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Producing
trash
 nowadays has become a basic problem which is faced by all over the world. In my point of view the
house hold
a social unit living together
household
sector
 is producing much more
trash
. One of the
example
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examples
 which can be taken from household
sector
 is that the edible items which are not eaten by the people are
also
 thrown in
trash
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the trash
.
the
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The
 other factor which helps in producing a large amount of garbage is wastage of paper which is used as a resource material in schools. The industrial
sector
 is
also
 not far behind in producing
trash which
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trash, which
 goes widely in sea water
thus
 killing the marine life.Civilians, all
alone cannot
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alone, cannot
 control or regulate the reduction of
trash
 on its own. They may keep their
surrounding
the environmental condition
surroundings
clean but
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clean, but
 a major step has to be taken by a
government
 as well.
First
 of all
government
 has to take a step against the schools which are wasting the resources after every six months by making bulletin boards. Through
this
 huge amount of paper which is being discarded and thrown as a
trash
 will be saved.
Secondly
,
government
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the government
also
 has to take steps towards the industrial
sector
 by compelling and restricting them not to throw the
trash
 in
water which
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the water, which
the water which
 is brutally damaging our marine life
also
 causing the environmental pollution. In
this
 way
government
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the government
 can play its major role in
garbage’s reduction
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the garbage’s reduction
.
while
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While
 summing up
,
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,
I would like to add that
this
 world is a gift of God and to lead a happy and cheerful life we need to make our environment safe
,
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,
 clean and healthy which is in our own hands.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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