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I want to talk about the trip to Northern Ireland. It was a year ago. I wanted to see both Northern Ireland and Republic of Ireland. I heard that there are many beautiful scenes in there. I went there by plane, and it took almost three hours to arrive, so it could be hard to put up with the flight if you don't like to sit in a chair for three hours. I enjoyed the trip because I have seen many historical places and tasted some traditional meals,
such
 as champ. I had the opportunity to get to know Irish people. I have been in Derry, Belfast and Dublin. People need to go to either their jobs or school.
That is
 the main reason why people travel
everyday
Suggestion
every day
. They can be late to their schools or workplaces because they get stuck in traffic because of the congestion on motorways if they get on public transports,
such
 as busses,
minibusses
a light bus (4 to 10 passengers)
minibuses
. I don't know what these some people assume to happen in the future, but I don't think that frequency of these travels will not change because people will have to travel where they need to go in the future too I think if you stay abroad long enough, you can broaden your view of life because different cultures look the world differently, and you can gain something new from them. You can
also
 learn
new kind
Suggestion
a new kind
new kinds
 of musics, meals and so on. Yes, travel can have a positive
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
 on a
country
's economy.
For example
, Tourism incomes make an important part of a
country
's GDP for countries
such
 as Spain, Greece, Italy and even Turkey. Tourists stay in hotels, go shopping, having meals, visiting museums and so on. If the members of a
country
 visit abroad occasionally, these people may begin to accept differences because they often witness different cultures and ways of living, so the tolerance towards differences develop in that
country
.

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