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It is necessary for parents to attend a parenting training course to bring their children up. Do you agree or disagree.

#parents #course #children
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These days in many countries the short term courses related to parenting has been evolved. While some argue that parents should attend the parenting training
course
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 for upbringing, their children I,
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, disagree with them due to lack of guardians
advice
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 and inbuilt the
talent
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 of a parent. The main reason why
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 courses are high in demand in many countries is due to an increase in the rise of the nuclear family and lack of parental or grandparental
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. To elucidate, nowadays, there is a trend of a nuclear family, so many new parents often do not have enough skills and knowledge about how to raise a child, resulting in an increase of
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course
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.
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,
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 parents do not seek
advice
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 from their parents or grandparents as believing that joining
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 a
course
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 will enhance their knowledge.
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, in India, most new couples who will become parents or became parents are giving priority to joining parenting training
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 because lack of knowledge about or not taking suggestions and
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 from their parents how to raise its infant. Another reason is having an inbuilt
talent
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. It is true that many parents have the
talent
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 of raising their child, which evolves as time pass by; due to
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, there is no need to join
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 courses.
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, they do not require any theoretical practice because the practical situation gives more expertise.
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, in Japan, many parents have grown their children without
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 training as they believe that practical things provide a broader view rather than theoretical or research studies. In conclusion,
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 many believe that joining
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 parenting training crash
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 is more beneficial, in my view, it is not necessary due to
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, having parental
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 and living with parents, and
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, being to have an inbuilt
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 which gradually increases are far more fruitful.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • parenting training
  • child-rearing
  • valuable guidance
  • effective techniques
  • child development
  • psychology
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