The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they traveled abroad and why they traveled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
Given in the table is information collected by a survey carried out on UK residents' purposes of travelling abroad and given in the bar chart are places where they mainly went to. As shown in the illustration, from 1994 to 1998
British
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the British
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went overseas chiefly for holiday and their main choice of final destination was Western
Europe
. The total trend was
upwards
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upward
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. Having a closer look at the table, it can be reckoned that holiday abroad retained
a
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fully dominant features and was in its trend in
increase
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an increase
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( being about 15246 people in 1994 and reaching 20700 people in 1998).
Moreover
, some British chose to travel abroad for business, with figures about five times and six times lower than those
of
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for
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holiday
reason
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reasons
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in 1994 and 1998 respectively. Followed by that was visits to friends and relatives. Other reasons recorded the lowest
number
compared with others, and the figures were rather unstable during the period. Among the areas picked as destinations, Western
Europe
was chosen by
a
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the
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majority of tourists
while
North America was of the least options. The gap between those two places was huge, as the
number
of English visitors to Western
Europe
was nine times higher than that of North America.
Furthermore
, from 1994 to 1995, the
number
of British
to
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in
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Western
Europe
dwindled but upsurged again toward 1998. During the same time, North America remained stabilized. English visitors
also
opted for other areas, but the
number
of them was far lower than that went to Western
Europe
.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words europe, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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