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The Internet has dramatically altered our lives over the past few decades. Although some of these changes have been negative, the overall effect of this technology has been positive. What are your opinions on this?

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There is no question that the Internet has brought a significant change to our lives in recent years.
However
, there remains some disagreement as to whether the overall effect of
this
 technology has been positive to negative. While there are certainly valid arguments to
this
 contrary, I personally believe that the Internet benefits far outweigh its drawbacks. On the one hand, it is indisputable that the Internet has revolutionized our ways of communication. Yet, it has been obvious that some of us are faced with the risk of social isolation, which makes people prefer to spend their leisure time with machines rather than trying to socialize with other people. As a matter of facts, many theses have asserted its counterproductive, especially in youngsters.
Additionally
,
this
 technology
also
 has affected students’ academic achievement, the ease of obtaining information these days has killed the desire
of
Suggestion
to
 seek for knowledge.
Consequently
, they might not meet the academic qualification, which most employers require nowadays. Which would in turn mean an increasing number of unemployment.
On the other hand
, the Internet has placed the entire word at our fingertips. In earlier times, conducting a research entailed moth or maybe years, because of the lack of information and data. Now, information can be accessed at the click of a button.
This
 change has increased the pace of development dramatically.
Furthermore
, you can now chat with your friend on the other side of the world in less than a
second
. In fact the world has become a small village. In conclusion, Despite the harmful effects of the Internet that cannot be understated, I believe
that is
also
 has made the world a better place to live in.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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