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The car is a disastrous 20th Century invention that has made the world’s cities more dangerous and polluted, as well as being responsible for the deaths of millions of people in accidents. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that the
car
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 is a disastrous invention of the 20th Century. The
car
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 has affected cities by the danger of traffics and pollution of gas emission,
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, it causes numerous accidents and deaths. In my opinion, I disagree that the
car
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 is a disastrous invention,
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, I
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 think that the
car
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 has some negative aspects. There is no doubt that the
car
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 has given us faster
transportation
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. For one thing, it has become more useful and safer in emergency cases. One clear example is, the vehicles
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 as ambulance, police
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 and fire truck are working to help people’s lives. When an incident happens, they run to the accident scene and have saved millions of people’s lives.
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, the faster
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 possibilities to ship food and supplies everywhere including rural areas. If the
car
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 had not been invented, our normal lives would be more difficult.
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, the
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 has several negative aspects. Another point to consider is the issue of traffic jams. Recently, too many people drive
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car
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cars
a car
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, the roads in the big cities are packed with cars. From
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 phenomenon, it will provoke
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 accidents and air pollution from gas emission. Regarding that issue, the government advocates the citizens to use public
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 to reduce the traffic flow.
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 will help to reduce the problem caused by the
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. In conclusion,
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 there are several disadvantages of the
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, I believe that the
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 invention has given our lives safer and more convenient way of life.
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, it is generally advisable for people to select other
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 to decrease the problems caused by the
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.
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