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The car is a disastrous 20th Century invention that has made the world’s cities more dangerous and polluted, as well as being responsible for the deaths of millions of people in accidents. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that the
car
 is a disastrous invention of the 20th Century. The
car
 has affected cities by the danger of traffics and pollution of gas emission,
furthermore
, it causes numerous accidents and deaths. In my opinion, I disagree that the
car
 is a disastrous invention,
however
, I
also
 think that the
car
 has some negative aspects. There is no doubt that the
car
 has given us faster
transportation
. For one thing, it has become more useful and safer in emergency cases. One clear example is, the vehicles
such
 as ambulance, police
car
 and fire truck are working to help people’s lives. When an incident happens, they run to the accident scene and have saved millions of people’s lives.
Secondly
, the faster
transportation
 possibilities to ship food and supplies everywhere including rural areas. If the
car
 had not been invented, our normal lives would be more difficult.
On the other hand
, the
car
 has several negative aspects. Another point to consider is the issue of traffic jams. Recently, too many people drive
car
Suggestion
cars
a car
,
consequently
, the roads in the big cities are packed with cars. From
this
 phenomenon, it will provoke
car
 accidents and air pollution from gas emission. Regarding that issue, the government advocates the citizens to use public
transportation
 to reduce the traffic flow.
This
 will help to reduce the problem caused by the
car
. In conclusion,
although
 there are several disadvantages of the
car
, I believe that the
car
 invention has given our lives safer and more convenient way of life.
Accordingly
, it is generally advisable for people to select other
transportation
 to decrease the problems caused by the
car
.
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