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What factors are important in achieving success in your life?

There are so many vitally important factors in our lives which enable us to achieve our goals and dreams. According to a recent article, every
person
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 in our society has a unique set of abilities at his or her disposal. The article did not state which factors lead to our
success
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.
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 why I intend to have a look at two of them in detail. It goes without saying that our
personality
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 is what has a major influence on our decisions and behaviour. If somebody is strong-willed, it is very unlikely that
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person
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 will not stand up to any trials in the future.
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, delivering
success
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 would not cause him or her any severe issues.
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, those people who are more sensitive and closed would probably struggle with achieving their aims. Since public speaking started playing an important role, it is desirable to be the
person
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 who is different in terms of your voice, gestures, confidence and other things.
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, being a
person
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 with a strong
personality
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 has several assets. Not only is it easier to deliver your goals, but it can
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 have a positive impact on listeners. Another potential way of ensuring
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 is your qualifications. It cannot be denied, that those people who were provided with the right qualifications are more successful.
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, it can be questioned. If you are not able to take advantage of having a good degree, you can fail.
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, from my point of view, these people often have a lack of communication skills which often play an important role when it comes to their
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. To sum up, as far as I am concerned, our
personality
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 outweighs the advantages of having good qualifications. If we didn't have a strong
personality
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, we wouldn't be able to study and stand out from the crowd to be heard.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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