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Band 7.5

You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centres in your country all look very similar to each other. You don't fully agree with this opinion. Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter say which points in the article you agree with explain ways in which your town centre is different from most other town centres offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article

Dear Sir or Madam, I am Shweta Bhat from Waterloo. I am writing
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 letter in respect to an article which was published in your newspaper. I want to inform you that I do not fully agree
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 the claims made about the
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centres
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 in my country that they all look similar to each other.
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, I agree that most of the
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centres
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 in our country have large parking spaces and a wide variety of shops.
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, all the city
centres
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 have signs on each corner which make it easy for
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people to find the right shop.
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, take the example of the
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 centre which is near my place. It is different in many ways from other city
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 as it has an underground playing space for teenagers and has 10 entry gates in all directions.
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, I would suggest you visit my
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 and I can show you some great places. I think
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 would give you a clear idea about my place. Let me know if you are interested and you can contact me at [email protected]. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Thank you. Yours faithfully, Shweta Bhat.

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task response
Your response is well-structured and addresses all parts of the task. You effectively point out which parts of the article you agree with, how your town is different, and you offer a guided tour. Consider expanding the explanation of your town's uniqueness for even greater clarity.
coherence cohesion
The logical flow of information is strong, with clear progression from agreement to explanation and then to the invitation. However, you might enhance some transitions between ideas for a smoother flow.
task response
The letter maintains a polite and formal tone throughout, which is appropriate for a letter to a newspaper editor.
coherence cohesion
Clear structure with a good introduction, body paragraphs, and a strong closing that includes a call to action.
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