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Exposure to international media such as films, TV and megazines has significant impact on local culture. What do you think has been the impact? Do you think its advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Gathering
information
 through global news outfits
such
 as movies, television and print media has
huge effect
Suggestion
a huge effect
 on
traditional way
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the traditional way
 of life owing to modification of our total methods of doing things. The demerit of
this
 change is
loss
Suggestion
the loss
 of value in our local language.
However
, the benefits surpass the drawbacks in the sense that
promotion
Suggestion
the promotion
 of human
right
 and
equality
 has been established through
this
. The main impact of international
information
 transmission on
local way
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the local way
 of life is
improvement
Suggestion
improved
improving
. Various aspects of local culture have been modified into acceptable standards.
For example
, exposure to media across
continent
Suggestion
the continent
 has changed the mode of dressing in Africa for the better. Fashion has been introduced in African clothing. Approach to societal rules and regulations have developed owing to assimilation via internationally renowned media outfits. The major drawback of global media
such
 as home videos, television and newspapers is loss of worth in our native tongues. Apart from colonialism, international relationship through foreign media has played a significant role in devaluing our natural mother tongues because foreign news outlets communicates with foreign languages
such
 as English and French which makes the young-ones pay less attention to their native languages.
For instance
, many Nigerian
children mainly
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children, mainly
 communicate in English nowadays. The principal gain of foreign media is promotion of human
right
 and
equality
. The
information
 gotten from
news
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the news
 outside
continent
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the continent
 showcasing the need for every citizen’s
right
 to be respected regardless of race, gender or age.
This
 has made the society more democratic.
For example
, in Nigeria,
woman
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a woman
 now expresses their rights unlike before due to news got from the outside world.
This
 benefit outclasses the demerits of exposure to international media because knowledge of
right
 and
equality
 gives
rises
Suggestion
rise
 to freedom.
For instance
, in
south eastern
situated in or oriented toward the southeast
southeastern
 part of Nigeria, Osu (outcast) system has been abolished through
this
. In conclusion, the major impact of
information
 gathered through foreign news outlets is
modification
Suggestion
modified
modifiable
. The merits outweigh the disadvantages because awareness of human
right
 and
equality
 leads to freedom which is the base for democracy.

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