The bar chart shows the percentage of total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2003, and projections for 2050.

The bar chart shows the percentage of total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2003, and projections for 2050.
The bar chart compares
overall
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the overall
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global
population
,who live in four various countries namely:
India
,
China
,
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USA
and
Japan
) from 1950 to 2003 including calculation to 2050.
Overall
,It is obviously clear,that
India
and
China
have the highest
percentage
of
population
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the population
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over the period shown,
while
the lowest
percentage
of
total
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the total
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population
consisted in
Usa
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USA
and
Japan
. In 1950,
China
consisted a majority
percentage
of people over 20,which was a peak and going to
the
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2050 the amount of total
population
decreased to exactly 15,as opposed,was in
India
in 1950.
By contrast
with
population
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the population
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of
China
,from 2002 to 2050
India
demonstrate an
increasing
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in the number of society about 16 and 18 respectively . In terms of
USA
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the USA
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and
Japan
,at the beginning of the year,
an
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apply
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approximately 7
percentage
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per cent
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of people
was
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were
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depicted by
USA
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the USA
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compared with
Japan
,
it
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which
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was under 5
percentage
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percent
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of
total
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the total
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global
population
.
The exactly
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Exactly
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5
percentage
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per cent
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of
total
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the total
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society resided in
USA
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the USA
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in
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between
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2002 and 2050 years.
By contrast
,
Japan
accounted for a negligible amount of
total
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the total
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global
population
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "by contrast, overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, india, china, usa, japan, percentage with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • total world population
  • countries
  • 1950
  • 2003
  • projections
  • 2050
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
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