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You recently received a letter from your freind asking for an advice to go to a college or to find a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to your freind, In your letter include why he would not enjoy goin to college. why getting a job is good. suggest few good jobs for him

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Dear Chandana, I hope
this
 letter finds you well. I recently received your letter, and I’m glad you reached out for advice regarding your decision to either go to
college
 or find a
job
. After giving it some thought, I believe getting a
job
 would be the best choice for you, and I’ll explain why.
First,
from what I know about you, I think you might not enjoy the academic environment of
college
.
College
 often requires a lot of theoretical learning, long hours of lectures, and assignments, which may not align with your strengths. You’re someone who thrives in practical, hands-on situations, and
college
 could feel monotonous and less rewarding for you.
On the other hand
, getting a
job
 has several advantages. For one, you can start earning money right away, which will give you financial independence and help you support yourself or even pursue your personal goals. A
job
 will
also
 allow you to gain practical experience and skills in the real world, which can be more valuable than a degree in certain industries.
Additionally
, working will help you build connections and a network, which is crucial for future career growth. In terms of jobs, I think you would excel in roles that involve hands-on work, creativity, or problem-solving. You might want to consider positions like a technician, where you can apply your technical skills, or a customer service representative, where your communication skills could shine. Another option could be entering a trade,
such
 as carpentry or plumbing, which can offer good pay and stability without the need for a
college
 degree. Ultimately, the decision is yours, but I believe starting a
job
 will give you more satisfaction and personal growth in the long run. Whatever path you choose, I’ll always support you. Best of luck with your decision! Regards, Shehani
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task achievement
Try to include specific examples or experiences that could strengthen your argument further.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph transitions smoothly to maintain a clear flow of ideas.
task achievement
Your letter has a warm, supportive tone which is suitable for writing to a friend.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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