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Some people fail in school, but end up being successful in life. Why do you think that is the case? What is the most important thing to succeed in lif

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Many people who are considered to be a failure in school end up to be successful in their lives. In my opinion, having good communication skills and Following
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's passion, which is the most important ingredient for
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, could be the possible
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 for their
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.
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, communication skills can be
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 of the reasons for the
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 of people who fail in schools. Many schools tend to neglect developing these skills, which is vital for
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's survival. Having
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 skill is beneficial because they help to develop contacts and relations which can help an individual with job and business prospects.
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, a friend of mine who had below-average scores at school owns a business
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 successful and earns more only because of his contacts who had helped in bringing traffic to his venture.
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, the ability to handle failures can
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 be another
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. Considering failures to improve
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's mistakes can be helpful to achieve
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, following
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's interests is the most important thing for
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 in life and can be the
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 for
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 of failures.
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 is because when people follow something they are passionate about, they put in extra effort to achieve what they want.
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, M.S.Dhoni, who was working for the railways, never gave up on his passion for cricket and it is the
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 why he is
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 of the most famous cricketers in the world. People might not enjoy the same
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 if they follow something they are not interested in as they might lose interest eventually.
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 can lead to a rather monotonous life for an individual. To conclude, following
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's passion along with good communication skills can help an individual to live a successful life.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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