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Band 5

Some students choose to study in another country for a time during high school or university. What do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad?

Pursuing graduation or
post graduation
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post-graduation
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 from foreign institutes is gaining popularity amongst
students
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.
This
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 essay would suggest that better quality of education and meeting people from different
culture
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cultures
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 are the major advantages of studying abroad
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while
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 its expensive nature and the cultural shock
,
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apply
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 that a few
students
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 may experience
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 are the possible cons of studying in another country. The kind of education these foreign universities provide
are
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 of the highest quality. The
students
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 are encouraged to participate in the immense research work these institutes undertake
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thus
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 helping the
students
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 to gain
deep
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 understanding of the subjects. In a recent report by IIT Mumbai, 60% of the student placed in reputed firms said that research assignments played an important part in their curriculum.
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, these
students
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 get an opportunity to meet and work with fellow
students
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 from different nationalities,
thus
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 helping them to improve their interpersonal skills.
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, pursuing tertiary schooling
from
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different
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a different
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 country may prove to be too expensive.
Students
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 may not be financially strong to cope with the cost
which
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, which
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 includes tuition fees, accommodation fees, cost of
foods
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food
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, clothes, transportation
etc
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, etc
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.
In a
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 recent survey conducted by the University of Mumbai revealed that 40% of their
students
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 work in part-time jobs to fund their studies.
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, pupils may suffer from
the
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cultural shock as these
students
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 may not be able to quickly adjust to the foreign environment.
According to
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 the Immigration
Center
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 of Canada, 30% of the
students
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 enrolled during
winter
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 session opt out within 7 weeks
from
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of
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 their arrival in the country. In conclusion, studying abroad is advantageous as it provides the student an opportunity to access good quality education and develop interpersonal skills by meeting people from different ethnic
group
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groups
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.
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, high cost factor and inability to blend in
foreign
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a foreign
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 environment are its biggest drawbacks.

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structure
The plan is clear, but each paragraph should have a stronger link to your view. Make a clear statement in the intro and tie each paragraph to that view.
position
Your position is not very strong. State your view clearly in the conclusion and keep it in line with the points you gave.
language
Use short, simple sentences. Some lines are long and hard to read. Break long sentences into two parts.
content
The essay uses examples from named places. Check these facts and use simple examples you can prove.
language
Watch small mistakes in punctuation and word form (for example, 'foods' should be 'food').
structure
Clear intro, body, and conclusion structure.
content
Good use of numbers and examples to back up points.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exposure
  • Diverse cultures
  • Global awareness
  • Improves language skills
  • Enhances employment prospects
  • Develops independence
  • Self-reliance
  • Homesickness
  • Cultural shock
  • High costs
  • Tuition
  • Living expenses
  • Educational systems
  • Styles of teaching
  • Isolated
  • Disconnected
  • Reintegrating
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