some people believe that in order for a hobby to be enjoyable, it needs to be difficult in some way do you agree or disagree

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In over the whole world, people tend to have a
time
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for leisure and doing what they want to do in
anyway
Suggestion
any way
.
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.
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this
Suggestion
This
time
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is
disgnated
assign a name or title to
designated
for doing hobbies
,
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,
whether with friends or solo
.
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.
Some
Suggestion
Some
people spend the leisure
time
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in doing bad things
,
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,
such
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as smoking and being addicted to social media and computer games,
this
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is as well is not appropriate
.
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.
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although
Suggestion
Although
it is legal to spend your
time
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by playing
vedio
the visible part of a television transmission
video
games.
It
Suggestion
It
is a
wast
spend thoughtlessly; throw away
waste
waist
of
time
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;
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;
because
this
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kind of game will not give you benefits or make you learn something new.
Thus
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, all kinds of children have to concentrate on doing hobbies that benefit the
Commiunity
a group of people living in a particular local area
community
.
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of accomplishment
  • overcoming obstacles
  • gratifying
  • continuous source of enjoyment
  • relaxing activities
  • unwind and de-stress
  • counterproductive
  • mental break
  • subjective
  • personal preference
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