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Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

#children #computers #age #hours
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It is irrefutable that
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the computer
 played the mandatory role in the 20th century. In fact, we cannot imagine a life without
computer
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moreover
in addition
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, children succour
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 from an early
age
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 and they spend their most of time in it.In
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 essay, I will discuss both the positive and negative consequences use of a
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 from an early
age
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 and spend long hour with them and based on I will derive a conclusion.
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 with, uses of
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 from an early
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 are the plethora advantage of children.
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, It helpful in higher education as well future job.
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 is because as we all know that in concurrent era, it is necessary to give cut that competition in works and studies in every aspect of life which is possible only from to learn something new
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 as
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 language, communication skill, etc.
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, google recruits the people based on
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 language skill
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 as Java, embedded, c
,
Accept space
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c++.
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, students can able to more familiar with
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 from an earlier year which augment an information on students.
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, It is
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 useful for the nation to find an expert engineer in the future. On the other side, over the uses of
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 can increase the chances of addiction of
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.
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, over addiction create detrimental mental Ailment.
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, according to serve in times of India, more than 20% of children are victimized by over the addiction of
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 in India in between 2015-20, which is inimical problem for the government.
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, a student cannot concentrate on their studies and they are not able to spend their time in studies because they become too lazy. In recapitulation, use of
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computers
a computer
 from an early
age
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 increases the chances of employment and
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 it will be useful in the future for higher studies. Despite, there are few drawbacks
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 as mental diseases, laziness etc.

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