Topic: In the modern world, it is no longer necessary to use animals for food, clothing or medicine. To what extent do you agree or disagree? disagree?

That fauna species are harnessed as sources of materials for human consumption,
suchsuch
to so extreme a degree
such
such such
as eating, wearing and curing diseases remains a source of controversy. From my perspective, I partially disagree
to
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with
the statement that no longer are animals essential to be sacrificed for those activities. On the one hand, human demands may be satisfied without animals’
overexploitation
. The more developed are clinical techniques, the fewer animals are killed for medical purposes.
For instance
, a large amount of pain-killing drugs packaged in whether capsule or tablet derive from man-made materials
instead
of animal materials.
Similarly
,
although
many pants and shirts are made from cotton or synthetic materials, they are cost-effective in price and lucrative in design, which explicitly meets the demands of most city-dwellers.
On the other hand
, it is discernible that animals play
a
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an
inevitable role in meeting human’s varied demands.
First
and foremost, one plausible rationale which needs to be taken into account is that it is impossible to force everyone to become a vegetarian,
fruitarian
or
breatharian
(plural) the lay members of a male religious order
brethren
rather than consuming greasy, lean meat, steak pie and fried chicken, which whet people’s appetite.
Additionally
, research has shown that animal products include a high proportion of protein, the deficiency of which may pose a threat to one’s fitness and growth. As a prime illustration, if an athlete whose daily intake contains all five main types of food partakes in a race, he will gain a competitive advantage with strong muscles over those eating cauliflower, broccoli and cereals.
Secondly
, some privileged individuals from affluent families in Vietnam would prefer woollen sweaters made of leathers, tailor-made long silk dress or luxurious
jeweries
like pearls, which obliquely demonstrate their superiority to others. To be brief,
although
other products may substitute for animal products, the merits of utilizing animal products is undeniable
such
as providing the inhabitants with nutritious food, superior jewellers' and clothes which represent high living standards.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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