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Successful companies use advertisement to make more sales. What can make an advertisement very effective? Do you think this is a bad thing or a good thing for the society?

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To promote products for generating more revenues advertisements play a significant role in these days for
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 commercial organizations. Usage of creative ideology and touchy ending can make those quite potent which have more negative social impacts over the positive ones. Advertisements, the way to boost up the trading of commodities, become more effective if these contain creativity for attracting a particular group of people leaving a deep impression in their mind. As an exemplification, the advertisement of Grameenphone, a leading mobile
network
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 operator of Bangladesh, showed a child’s feelings about parrot expressed to her father over
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the phone
 which was almost unable before launching their strong
network
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 with low cost. As an outcome, a wide range of community attracted to use that cell
network
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 to keep parents or relatives close to them superseding the distance barrier.
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, business promotion may have favourable influences
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of
 society to some extent like the cheap mobile call cost lets the
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 fishermen
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get
 proper price
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to
 market by communicating each other all over the country shown by Banglalink, another leading cell
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 operator of Bangladesh.
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, many companies present their products by celebrities in
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a dream
 like manners despite having no good impacts to individuals or
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communities
the community
. The world’s leading beverage organization Coca Cola can be an example that claims people to be boosted greatly by drinking it though it is not healthy at all and is profiting more than any other
good
any substance that can be metabolized by an animal to give energy and build tissue
food
 products. To
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 gist, creating advertisements in clever way only for revenue generation can hamper the value for mankind;
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, with positive latent potential can attract mass people in a right way ensuring the social quality and gather more profits as well.

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