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Children's education is expensive. In many countries, governments pay education fees for children. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Children's tuition fees can be quite high in some countries and
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 are paid by their governments. I am of the opinion that the disadvantages of
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 financial aid are eclipsed by the beneficial effects that it can produce. It is undeniable that there are potential drawbacks of public bodies financing children’s
education
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. Perhaps the most important point is that the government can propagandize young students and teach them a biased or false version of history. An extreme example of
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 is North
Korea where
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Korea, where
 the authorities use
education
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 as a means of instilling blind nationalism into their citizens and creating a perception that the government is always right and has the ultimate power.
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 phenomenon,
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, only emerges in a few particular nations, and its impacts seem to be less significant. Notwithstanding the aforementioned arguments, I would argue that the benefits of
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 aid are of greater importance partly because it helps ease
financial burden
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the financial burden
financial burdens
 and partly because it improves future employability of several people. With regard to the former,
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 financial support will greatly benefit children whose parents fail to meet the cost. Some charities and organizations may as well provide help to a certain extent, but their contributions would be limited. On a societal level, eliminating school fees allows every child to gain access to basic
education
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 which may equip them with
fundamental knowledge
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the fundamental knowledge
 and skills to enter the labour market after graduating. In conclusion, I hold the belief that the advantages of the government paying for children's
education
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 clearly overshadow the drawbacks involved.

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