Instead of training a few athletes to win medals at the Olympics, governments should spend the money on programmes encouraging the public to be active and stay healthy.

The bureaucrats should spend the finance on energy projects to motivate and give well-being awareness to the people to lead a healthy life
instead
of putting money on athletes trainings. While I agree athletes training is essential in every country, I believe that the government definitely spend the finance for health programmes. On the one hand, there are many reasons behind the way government spends credits on sports training.
Firstly
, it may possible to represent our country name in worldwide, if the athlete wins any medal in the Olympics.
Secondly
, not only academics, but
also
sports are necessary for people because they improve their fitness along with career aspects.
For example
, in 2017, The Hindu Times reported that the eminent sports star Sania won the gold medal in Olympic and represents the country name greatly
On the other hand
, the fitness projects are important for people to maintain a healthy life without effect much communicating diseases.
In addition
, it provides well-being awareness in all areas like rural and urban areas. And specifically in recent years people prone to get many communicable diseases like cholera, leprosy and tuberculosis. If bureaucrats spend money on the fitness projects, it may possible to reduce these types of diseases.
For example
, AIDS infection has been controlled nowadays by conducting awareness programmes. In conclusion,
although
, I agree that athletes training is an essential thing for the younger generation in recent years, I believe that health projects are necessary for people to maintain healthy for long life.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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