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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas. What are your opinions on this?

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Nowadays, supermarkets are filled with
food
 products from around the globe. Yet, there are arguments that supermarkets should not be fulled of imported
food
. I personally disagree with
this
 idea.
Firstly
, if there are no imported
food
 products in the supermarket, there will be a shortage of
food
, which are domestic products.
Moreover
, some nations do not have enough domestic
food
 for their citizens due to the lack of fertile lands or even the shortage of water. The fact that these countries
depends
Suggestion
depend
 on agricultural nations,
such
 as Ivory Coast has to import rice from Vietnam, which is an agricultural country.
Secondly
, the act of import increases significantly the chance of earning money and investing in a better
live
Suggestion
life
. Workers surely depend on
this
 to raise their incomes.
For instance
, Kenya relies on their agricultural cuisine import to have a better live. Most Kenyans place their bets on
this
 trade activity to have money for building constructions or having their children
to attend
Suggestion
attend
 schools.
Thirdly
,
this
 trade activity
absolutely reduce
Suggestion
absolutely reduces
 all the environment wastes.
Additionally
,
far
appropriate to; intended for
for
 many
food
 imports are transferred by sea, which cut down on not only the price of these cuisines but
also
 the exhaust fumes. Take Russia as a case in point, with a long coastline,
this
 country
successfully lower
Suggestion
successfully lowers
 the pollution which result from transporting
food
 by road. To sum up, the benefits of
food
 imports way overweight the domestic
food
. I am sure that culture, environment, and people will be profitable from
food
 imports.

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