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everyone should adopt for a vegetarian diet because eating meat can cause serious health problems. Do you agree or disagree?

#diet #meat #health
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It is agreed that serious well-being issues are the cause of consuming
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 a fruitarian
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 should be chosen
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 by people.
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 essay partly agrees with that suggestion because of the effects on fitness by eating
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 and disagree with implementing a vegan
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. The essay will
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 look at why people consider a vegan
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 discuss the drawbacks of it. It is undeniable that people nowadays prefer a vegetarian
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 than a
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diet
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 because
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, consuming
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 promotes the development of animal agriculture.
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, to meet the need of
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 to a large-scale population, it is hard to guarantee the quality of animal farms.
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, those farmers would be lack of hygiene, which are suitable environments for germs and bacteria being harmful to human well-being
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 as chicken virus or Coronavirus.
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, recent researches from Cambridge university show that 70 percent of human diseases like cancer and heart diseases are linked to consuming
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 from animal agriculture.
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,
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 contains a large amount of cholesterol and protein. Take beef as an example, over-consuming beef is the reason for gout diseases and lack of fibre for organs causing constipation.
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, adopting a vegan
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 could cause some health disease if people do not have enough perceptions about it.
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 to say, people would be lack of nutritions because vegetables have low protein. As a consequence, malnourished is unavoidable. In conclusion, eating
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 causes some health problems yet having a vegetarian
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 is not always good if there is not enough of perceptions. In my opinion, people should integrate these two diets.

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