Growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including for food and research. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Firstly
,
majority
Suggestion
the majority
of people have been thinking that we, human kinds, are superior of animals and nature is dictating that creature which have more strength may eat
the weak
Suggestion
the weaker
ones.
Therefore
, according to
this
point of view, there is no reason why humans cannot exploit the other creatures. They even do not regard that as
extinction but
Accept comma addition
extinction, but
their
Suggestion
they're
right
, which comes from birth. Take the hunters
for instance
. They, devastatingly, are able to kill the animals without thinking of their emotions.
However
, the other people, myself included, argue that no matter how severe situation we are in, we do not have
right
to kill an animal for our own benefit. It should be thought by
reverse direction
Suggestion
the reverse direction
in order to comprehend the fact behind that opinion.
For example
, what would people think if a wild lion hunt a
children
Suggestion
child
and kill him/her? Probably anyone can think that
lion
Suggestion
the lion
had every
right
to
hunts
Suggestion
hunt
them. In conclusion, there have been endless argument throughout the history about whether we should exploit the animals or not.
Although
vast majority
Suggestion
the vast majority
a vast majority
of people claim that we have
right
to kill them, I strongly believe that they should not be seen as
servant
Suggestion
servants
a servant
to
man kinds
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
mankinds
and we do not have
right
to hunt them as we want.

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