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Choose one of the following topics and write Problem/Solution paragraphs. You should link the problems with the solution. (150-200 words) 1. Negative effects of social media

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The most efficient way to reach out to the world in general is through Social Media. It contains many platforms to promote your views, meet new people, improve your skills and many more advantages.
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, it can do more harm than good. The side effects of social media have increased over the
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 decade.
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, wasting too much time on Social Media without gaining benefits, like earning money or improving skills.
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 problem is especially serious amongst young people.
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, spreading rumours and hatred is one of the greatest side effects of social media. It is very important to realize that not every information conveyed through social media should be accurate and shared. The serious outcomes that may arise
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 of the mentioned effects could be avoided through many solutions. One of the most effective solution is parental monitoring. Parents need to be attentive to their children use of the internet, by making sure they don’t harm themselves or others with their use of Social Media.
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, people need to have self-awareness to not become heavily dependent on
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 sites. Generally, people need to focus more on their offline hobbies, friends and ways to enjoy their lives.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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