The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2000 to travel to and from school using different types mode of transport. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2000 to travel to and from school using different types mode of transport. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart gives information about the frequency of commuting made by children at the age of 5 to 12 based on various transportation means in 1990 and 2000.
Overall
, walking was the most popular mode of transport
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children from and to school in 1990. The
use
of passenger
car
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surged in 2000, generally at the expense of reducing the number of
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the journey
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journey
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journeys
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by walking and the
use
of
bicycle
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bicycles
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and public transportation. In 1990, walking was the most selected method for commute,
at
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over 12
million
journeys annually. The utilization of
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bus
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buses
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came
at
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second
at approximately seven
million
trips. The
use
of private
car
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cars
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came at the least, with around 4
million
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rides
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annually.
In contrast
, trips made using passenger
car
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rose significantly in the year 2000, nearly increased
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threefold to approximately 11.5
million
trips;
whereas
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use
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other mode
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of transport decreased substantially, with the biggest fall
was
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found in walking.

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