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Now a day’s people have adopted an unhealthy lifestyle. Why do think this is? How could this problem be solved?

#day’s #people #lifestyle
In recent times, people have started adapting to sedentary lifestyle due to advancement in technology and long working hours.
This
 issue can be mitigated by the support of lawmakers and employer fitness programs. Most people are working long hours
thus
 do not find time to exercise and eat a healthy diet.
Thus
, people are more dependent on technology than before. Earlier, people used to buy groceries and cook their own food, but now, we are able to purchase packaged foods that are only required to be heated.
Additionally
, new website based applications,
such
 as “Menulog”, are offering online food delivery services because of which, people are no longer required to go out of their homes to eat.
Such
 kind of technological advancements is making people to stay at home and consume unhealthy diet that results in obesity and its related issues. One possible way to mitigate
this
 issue is that government needs to place strict rules for working hours.
For example
, many countries have laws that only allow employees to work 40 hours per week. The remaining time should be taken to look after their health.
Furthermore
, employers can
also
 offer employees with fitness program initiatives
such
 as organizing a mandatory fitness challenge. These initiatives can support people to focus on their wellbeing and improve their lifestyle as well as create perfect work life balance. In conclusion, due to advancement in technology and long working hours many people have adapted sedentary lifestyle,
however
, both employers and government can create an encouraging environment to lead a healthy life.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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