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Nowadays, the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what was has technology affected the types of relationship people make ? Has this become a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Advancements in technology have changed our lives,
there's no denying to
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there's no denying
 that. It has
also
 affected the means of
communication
 and the interaction among people. In
this
 essay, I will discuss various ways of how modern tech has shaped the lives of people. On one hand, modern ways have extended the horizon of
communication
.
In other words
, long distances are no longer a barrier for communications, with the help mobile phone one can easily talk to loved ones and video calling is a boon to the field of
communication
.
for
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For
 example, I study far from my home, but whenever I feel low and need motivation I talk to my family through Skype.
further
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Further
, as communications are more convenient, long distance relationships can
last
 longer.
On the other hand
, some people are not able to fully utilize the improvements of gadgets and create their own issues from the solutions. What I mean is, some find it difficult to manage their sorrow by just seeing people virtually and it often creates emotional imbalance in home, poor network connectivity
also
 plays
an
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a
 vital role in creating chaos.
for
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For
 instance, one of my aunt was so unhappy
because
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Because
 she was only able to watch his son because
voice
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the voice
 was not clear
due poor
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due to poor
 connection in that area.
As a result
, sometimes
miscommunication
 happens and which paves the way to the problems. To conclude, there are some pros and cons of technology
such
 as it help to interact people with ease and misunderstanding can happen due to lack of connectivity.
However
, modern ways of
communication
is
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are
 definitely a positive development and it is futuristic.

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