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Some people like to go to a live sporting event, while others prefer to stay at home and watch it on television. Which do you prefer? Discuss both views using personal examples.

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The way people consume professional sporting events varies from
person
 to
person
. Some like to watch sports events on television. Others,
on the other hand
, are more interested in going to the
stadium
 and watch the
event
 in
person
. Is one approach better than the other? Let’s examine. When you attend a live sporting
event
 in
person
, you actually get an opportunity to participate in the
event
. You get to see your favourite sports persons in flesh and blood.
That is
 probably why some people like to go to a
stadium
. The excitement that you get when you are part of a cheering crowd is not something that you can experience when you watch the same
event
 at home sitting in front of a
TV
. In my opinion, it is
this
 eagerness to be a part of the spectacle that draws people to the
stadium
. After all, watching an
event
 in
person
 is not exactly the same as watching
its
the thing named or in question
it
 broadcast on
TV
.
On the other hand
, watching a live sporting
event
 in
person
 does involve some risks. Certain sporting events like racing can cause injury to the spectators as well as to the participants. The exorbitant ticket prices are another problem that discourages people from going to the
stadium
. Watching a sporting
event
 on
TV
,
on the other hand
, costs nothing. You can do it in the comforts of your home: you don’t have to sit in the hot sun sweating. And if you still need company, you can invite your friends and create a mini
stadium
-like atmosphere at home. After
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 the situation, I couldn’t find anything to prove that watching sports events in
person
 is better than watching them on
TV
 or vice –versa. It is actually about personal preference and affordability. The truth is that most people who find contentment in watching a sporting
event
 on television will definitely appreciate it if they get an opportunity to watch it in
person
. In most cases the factors that discourage people from going to the
stadium
 is not a lack of
interest but
Accept comma addition
interest, but
 the huge price of the ticket and the limited availability of seats. If tickets are available and they have the money to spend, they are more likely to watch it in
person
 than on
TV
.

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