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Reducing global environmental damage should be handled by governments rather than individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#damage #governments #individuals
I tend to agree that the
government
 should be handled to reducing environmental damage. Every year we transform the enormous
amount
 of resources for buildings, car, plastics etc. Along with that, the enormous
amount
 of species has become extinct. I think
this
 global environmental problem must tackle an individual person because we are consumed and spender. We have to change habits for a better future.
For example
, people make it a habit to bring own shopping bag when go to shop, try to choose
second
 hand products, try to not leave foods etc. In primary industries case, trying to not pick more than necessary cattle, crops and fishes.
Moreover
, you should regard when you go shopping whether the product is renewable.
However
, the global environment has enormous
amount
 and complex problems, global warming, to waste foods and increasing
amount
 of CO2 emission. Now, these problems are getting worse year after year.
Therefore
, they need help from
government
, to name a few, developing facilities of recycling station, advancing solar and wind power. Especially, solar and wind power make a lot of energy and they are obvious efficient resources. The
government
also need
Suggestion
also needs
 to assist with individual company
that is
 trying to solve about these problems. The global environmental problem is not only individual country's problem, it relates to all over the world. The
government
 should support to these programs and sound an alarm bell to people. At the same time, we should change own habit to more simple way and try to avoid waste resources.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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