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The graph below shows how people buy music. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows how people buy music. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph illustrates trends in
music
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 buying habits between 2011 and 2018. It presents three different methods: streaming, downloading and buying CDs.
Overall
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, both
downloads
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 and physical
sales
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 of
music
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 have steadily declined. The latter has slumped since 2011,
while
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 the downturn for the former began in 2014.
However
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, there has been a sharp rise in people streaming
music
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 since 2013. In 2011, the majority of
music
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sales
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 were of CDs, at 55% of all
sales
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.
In contrast
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, streaming was not common at all at only 5%.
Also
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,
although
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 people had started to download
music
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, it only represented 35% of
sales
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. As
sales
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 of CDs began to fall,
downloads
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 started to rise. They rose steadily and
downloads
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 overtook physical
sales
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 in mid-2013. During the same period, streaming doubled to 10% but
then
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 it started to grow more dramatically.
Downloads
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 peaked in 2014 at about 43% of
sales
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 but fell to 30% by 2018.
This
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 was slightly higher than physical
sales
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, which shrank to 25%. Streaming,
on the other hand
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, overtook both of them and accounted for just over 40% of
sales
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 in 2018.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words music, downloads, sales with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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