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Some people feel that the design of newly constructed buildings in big cities should be controlled by governments. Others believe those who finance the construction of a building should be free to design it as they see fit. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is agreed by some individuals that modern style construction in urban areas should be under
government's
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government
 regulation. Others,
however
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, oppose that
project
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's financial provider must have their right over designing pattern of the building.
This
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 essay will depict several interesting ideas from both sides and share my personal opinion about the statement given. On one hand, it is mentioned by
opposite side
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the opposite side
 that the owner of the
development
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 should be free to
design
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 his own
project
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. Most inventors will definitely agree with the point. It is because they pay for a budget to operate the construction to fit in the way they prefer. In
real estate business
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the real estate business
, Siam Paragon, the largest shopping
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 in Bangkok, could provide a great instance. If the local authorities declare land use policy that affect their planned
development
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 negatively, the operator will either stand for their
right
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rights
, or shut down the
project
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.
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, whoever finance a building construction ought to be able to
design
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 their plan freely.
On the other hand
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, it is said that governments shall provide a proper regulation to control the
design
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 of the towers in big cities. Without a policy, the town may consist of diverse building pattern which does not illustrate
sense
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a sense
 of community. Provided there are no legal limitation is
this
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 issue, it would contribute to many political, social, and environmental problems to solve. So, they agree that the authority should regulate the pattern and purpose of
constructed
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constructing
building
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a building
the building
. Personally, I believe that there will be some plausible solution to overcome
this
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 issue. In
real estate market
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the real estate market
, there is a
project
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 called mixed-use
development
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.
This
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development
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 was
first
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 established in the United States to redevelop urban area and create suburb
development
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 hub. The
survey conducted
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survey, conducted
 by ULI suggests that mixed-use area benefits the surrounding community and allows a person who hold the ownership, to use his creativity to make the
project
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 pedestrian-oriented and environmentally friendly under the regulation declared by local authorities.
it
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It
, thereby, is my perspective that government shall allow the owner to
design
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 while partly control some issue. In conclusion, as the argument mentioned earlier will still be a dilemma situation among those who argue. There is a possible way that work out for both views. A planned mixed-use
development
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 is that possible solution. With its advantage on surrounding
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
neighbourhoods
 under governments' control, the finance provider will be able to generate the synergy inside to work systematically.
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