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The growth in online shopping will one day lead to the closure of shops in cities and towns Do you agree or disagree

#growth #closure #shops #cities #towns
The past years have seen a dramatic increase in online
purchase
. While some people believe it may lead to the closure of shops in cities and towns. I wholeheartedly think that
in_store
 shopping would definitely remain the most desirable way of shopping owing to many
justification
Suggestion
justifications
. Admittedly, shopping from
in_store
 is tremendously beneficial than e_store for many reasons.
First
 and foremost is shipping fees. If you chose to
purchase
 from a store or a mall, you would not have to pay shipping fees. Whereas, in online shopping you will need shipping fees.
For instance
, Amazon is putting shipping fees regardless your
purchasing
Suggestion
purchase
 amount.
Hence
,
in_store
purchase
 will not squander your money on unnecessary fees.
Secondly and
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Secondly, and
 even more importantly is experience a
product
 which means you can see the material and content of your
product
.
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.
 I believe it is extremely
helpful specially
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helpful, especially
helpful especially
 in purchasing personal things
such
 as clothing and check whether it fits
your
second person pronoun; the person addressed
you
 or not.
As a result
, you would be totally satisfied with your
product
.
In addition
, purchasing from
in_store
 has a plethora of benefits over online shopping. Advice from the staff is one of them. They can help you not only in choosing the appropriate products for
your
reflexive form of "you"
yourself
you
, but
also
 in comparing with other brands.
Furthermore
, urgency benefit. Which saves you time.
For example
, if you have a meeting tomorrow and you need a new suit, you would not have to wait delays with online shopping. Take
souq
Suggestion
Souq
.
com
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Corn
Com
 in Egypt as an example in which you will need at least three days to receive your
product
,
Nevertheless
, with
in_store
 shopping you can get it in the same day
Hence
, instant gratification is one of the main reasons behind the huge popularity of
in_store
 shopping as you can walk out of the door with your
purchase
. In conclusion,
although
 many benefits of online shopping,
in_store
purchase
 will definitely remain the most predominant way of shopping owing to no shipping fees are required, valuable advices from the staff, urgency and instant gratification.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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