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Overpopulation in many major urban centres around the world is a major problem. What are the causes of this and how can this problem be solved?

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Moving towards the 21st century, a large number of people are nowadays expressing a deeply growing concern about the explosion of population. In fact, it is widely believed that there is a sharp increase in the population of the main cities of the world, and overpopulation has become a challenging task for the nations to manage. As far as I am concerned, there has been a highly problematic issue, and
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 raises the question in relation to its causes and potential solutions to
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cope
 with.
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, some major points will be addressed in the following paragraphs.
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 with, there are two primary reasons causing the issue of metropolitan cities are getting over-crowded day by day.
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 of all, it is a well-documented fact that urban centres offer a wide variety of employment opportunities, high-paid work, and a better lifestyle. The most obvious example to prove is that the lack of basic facilities
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 as public transportation, medical systems, and entertainment services in rural areas, people
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 to migrate to urban centres.
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, there is no doubt that there are few colleges, universities, and companies in villages for young people.
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, a survey conducted by Oxford University showed that 65% of the total population of the countryside
area moved
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area, moved
 to big cities to find more job opportunities and higher study. In order to tackle with the above issue, there are a number of solutions that could be taken into consideration.
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 and foremost, governments and private sectors should coordinate to open up new plants and commercial sectors in rural areas, and it will provide employment and work opportunities to their natives. Equally important, there is no denying that governments should pay attention to the condition of undeveloped areas,
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 as transportation, infrastructure conditions should be improved urgently.
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, it is inevitable that governments should provide stimulus packs like money, technician, with the aiming to encourage local farmers to crop in their land. So, they can earn more money for their livings.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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