Some people think that children should be taught to be competitive in school others, however, say that cooperation and team working skills are more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Experts throughout both developing and developed nations, often argues, whether children should be more encouraged to learn skills
such
as cooperation and team player or it is more beneficial for them to be competitive. In my opinion, learning these skills may bring
better outcome
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a better outcome
better outcomes
in
future
Suggestion
the future
. In
this
eassy
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
easy
issue
, I shall examine a number of studies which shows that both viewpoints are, to some degree, justified. On on hand, there is ample, powerful, almost daily evidence that, competitive
beheviour
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
could bring immeasurable advantages to students. It is often observed that, students who are constantly pushing themselves to score
higest
greater than normal in degree or intensity or amount
highest
grades, excels in many
acedamic
associated with academia or an academy
academic
academies
academics
criterias
a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated
criteria
.
However
,
this
constant
performence
a dramatic or musical entertainment
performance
pressure, could be detrimental for their mental growth, because they are more likely to suffer from depression.
For example
, a recent study published by Oxford University illustrated that, more than 15% of students, every year commit suicide, as they are unable to perform
upto
Suggestion
up to
their
parents
Suggestion
parents'
expectations.
Thus
, seen in
this
light, it is clear that, encouraging over
amibitious
having a strong desire for success or achievement
ambitious
attributes in children, could be fatal. Whereas,
on the other hand
,
Accept space
,
motivating students to
devlope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
skills
such
as time management, cooperation and team player will be a better initiative towards their overall
personaltity
the complex of all the attributes--behavioral, temperamental, emotional and mental--that characterize a unique individual
personality
development. Children with these traits are able to exceed in almost every aspect of life, and are less likely to experience stress.
Also
, Many multinational companies, prefer to hire individuals with these personality traits.
This
is borne out by a study completed at University of Melbourne which demonstrated that, many top CEO's of large companies are better team players. In conclusion,
this
is a topic that time after time results in heated colloquy within society, but from the above argument, I am inclined to say that,
devloping
relating to societies in which capital needed to industrialize is in short supply
developing
these skills in children is, a much better approach towards education.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strive
  • healthy competition
  • real-world competition
  • excessive
  • stress
  • anxiety
  • win-at-all-costs
  • detrimental
  • character development
  • empathy
  • communication skills
  • group efforts
  • individual talents
  • self-reliance
  • independence
  • balanced approach
  • competitive learning environments
  • cooperative learning environments
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