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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school asked for your feedback o this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you've done since the course suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in connection with cookery
course
 which
is provide
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 institute of The Expert Food. I recently finished a short-term cooking
course
 for three months, which from January 18th to March 18th.
This
 training was
game changing
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 in my life since I completed
this
 valuable program. Let me describe in
details
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. Between cookery
training
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 I have learnt plethora type items
such
 as
first
 food (e.g. Burger, chicken fry and others), Chains cuisine.
Furthermore
, I learned how to clean after cook and properly serve
to
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foods
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food
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 to
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the customer
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customer
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 as well. After that, I started my own restaurant business which is quickly popular in my location because of testy and tidy. I am really happy and thanks to you. Would you kindly to another cooking
course
 like
traditional
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a traditional
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 meal. I am
happy
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 reason for
traditional
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 program
very
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 dependable. My many customers ask me when I will local food. I
also
 talk to my
course mate
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; they are very excited about
traditional
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 way. So, would you please arrange another short traditional
course
.
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 Thank you for your cooperation. I look forward to
hear
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 you
for
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 your earliest convenience. Yours faithfully, H. M.
Zahad
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Zahid
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