Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closue of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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consumerist world, the competition has been increased

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as a result

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manifold local businesses have died out which replace to the supermarkets.

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does not bring the closure

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the local community. I deem that it affects only on some initial level. Let's ponder deeper to have more

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topic. To commence with, it is irrefutable that local shops have become a part and partial to the people as they do not have to travel to the

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don't need to waste the time to

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basic items simultaneously.

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, if the local enterprises may closed, it will not as much endanger for the local existence. As in the case of emergency, when people do not have enough time to waste for getting the items, lack of local shops may generate

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troubles. To cite an example, in a society, the route of

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is 20 minutes far

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than nobody prefer to go there for buy

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vegetables and grocery. At the same time,

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proves as a boon for myriad people through which we can get all kinds of items

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a single place.

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in many cities people prefer to buy items from supermarkets

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as cinema and restaurants.

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it will much beneficial for a community as well. As the

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provides a platform to sell the products to the locals.

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provide jobs to the existence.

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way they can avoid the long distance travelling to get their bread and butter. To

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I pen down with saying that diminishing local shops may not threaten the existing of local people. Even, I reckon that it will provide more opportunities.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Topic Vocabulary:

homogenization
economies of scale
cultural diversity
local economy
natural economic progression
social hubs
community interactions
personal relationships
job losses
unique products and services

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Fully explain your ideas

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