Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

In
this
globalization era, the ability to master
language
besides
one's native
language
is deemed essential. It is argued that the
second
language
should be taught from a tender age. Even though it might add burden to pupils, I strongly believe that the benefits surpass the drawbacks because the capability of acquiring
new
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a new language
language
in early age simultaneously enhance children's cognitive ability and the brain capability allow children quickly master a foreign
language
; in the long-term children can have better career prospect as well as
improve children
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children improve
as a person to be more open-mindedness and tolerance.
Firstly
, the brain of pupils at
elementary
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the elementary school
an elementary school
elementary schools
school
is growing at a very rapid pace, it is
therefore
the elementary
school
is the prime time to let children get acquainted with new words and
language
.
In addition
, learning foreign
language
helps the student to improve their cognitive abilities
such
as thinking critically and solving complex problems. Based on UNESCO research, there is an evidence that elementary
school
students in Indonesia who learn
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
since kindergarten have better standardized test scores at the final year of elementary
school
.
Although
incorporating another
language
in children's curriculum would add
burden
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a burden
for children, it is worth the time because the benefit would
last
until their adulthood. During learning a foreign
language
in
school
, pupils will be exposed to other cultures that will lead them to have better tolerance and accept diversity. These skills will be beneficial for children as a member of society in the future.
Moreover
, children who
learn
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have learned
a foreign
language
since elementary
school
will likely to be more proficient in mastering the
language
,
this
would put the children in a better position in the future's competitive job market. To summarize, learning a foreign
language
since early age would bring numerous positive impact for
children both
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children, both
in short-term and long-term through enhancing their cognitive ability and personality as well as help them mastering the
language
to put them at the edge
for
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in
their career.
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Example:

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • pronunciation
  • self-conscious
  • cultural awareness
  • global society
  • proficiency levels
  • competitive job market
  • foundational skills
  • qualified teachers
  • recreational activities
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