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Internet social media have become very popular. To what extent do you think this is a good or bad thing? Why do you think this is the case?

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The social
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 sites are an innovation on the World Wide
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 that quickly gain popularity because allow users to communicate with everybody around the world.
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, as more famous social sites as more time there spend people that lead to an ambiguous result in a work or an education.
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, from my perspective, as a man who born before the internet appeared,
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 sites
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 elaborated with good aims in a part of communication;
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, after emerging drawbacks because today majority of people are comparing social
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 with drugs and tend to diminish using these sites.
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, few people can decline the fact that social sites have a huge positive impact on people`s life because have wide opportunities to liaise with like-minded people or relatives wherever they are.
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, presently people tend to travel or immigrate and occasionally social sites the only way for communication.
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, people can present their interests and other via filters can easier search friends for the interests.
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, how
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 was planned social
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 has the positive side because still help people connect with each other.
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, with time the internet social sites brought not only positive, but
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 negative because appeared a new type of fraud, and a problem with the wellness.
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, many
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 sites have shops there people buy something, thereby fraudsters adopted to steal information from debt cards.
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, using
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 assumes the sedentary style of life that leads to different types of sickness.
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, people cannot ignore these troubles and should accept that some part of the social sites is bad. To conclude, I believe that the social
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 can turn for the positive impact because presently it is a new for us and we only are starting learn how use it properly.
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, a security level each year will be improving that probably allow in the future using it more safety.
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