The increase in mobile phone use in recent years has transformed the way we live, communicate and do business. Mobile phones can also be the cause of social or medical problems. What forms do these problems take? Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages of mobile phones? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The transformation of communication from physical to virtual has been yielded by the invent of cellular device. The increased use of cellular phone has its own advantages and disadvantages and I believe that advantages overweigh the disadvantages.

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as cellular phones have transformed the physical communication into its virtual counterpart as business communications and meetings are conducted through emails and video conferencing respectively. People can stay in regular contact with their friends and families through video calls or simple phone calls overseas or in the same region.

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, overuse of mobile phones has affected a physical communication among people and create more health issues

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, people from same family barely talk to each other and prefer to indulge more in their online life. As all the communications are taking place online, people have become more distant and sometimes that leads to the problems like stress and depression.

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, these can be overcome by restricting usage of mobile phones and maintaining close contacts with family and friends. To conclude, balance between usage of mobile phones and social life can help to achieve the best out of technology and physical relations.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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302 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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