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the chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008

the chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008
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The chart below shows the proportion of people who ate five
portions
 of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008 The diagram below illustrates the citizen's value who consumes five
portions
 of fruit and vegetables a day around the UK
from
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in
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 the period between 2001 and 2008 Ordinarily, the number of citizens who ate five
portions
 of veggies increased each year, leading to a significant rise in the UK and
decline
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a decline
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 gradually until 2006. Meanwhile, woman's consumption was hitting a peak as high as those for any other gender every year. In 2001, the ratio of
children
ate
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who ate
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 5
portions
 of veggies per day located at over 10%,
whereas
men
 earned more than 15% and woman's proportion was highest at over 20%. In the
next
 3 years,
children
 and
men
 were stabilized
while
 the women grew sharply and earned over 25% in 2003
At
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In
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 2006, the percentage of
children
, women,
men
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and men
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 reached peaks of over 20%, 25%,
30
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and 30
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% respectively.
By contrast
, in the
next
 2 years, all the categories declined gradually except
men
 which
maintained
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was maintained
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 in 2007. In 2008, the proportion of citizens decreased to over 20% for
children
,
while
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apply
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25% for
men
 and 30% for women.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 90%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words portions, children, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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