The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The represented diagram depicts a map with two potential locations for a proposed shopping mall for
inhabitants
of Brandfield. Correct article usage
the inhabitants
On
Change preposition
Overall
overall
, it is significant to note that the first position might be between the housing estate and the city Add an article
the overall
center
, Change the spelling
centre
while
the second
would be constructed on the south below the city center
.
If the shopping plaza was located at S1, the site would be very attractive Change the spelling
centre
due to
a visited area by a great number of individuals,
but would be too bustling because of railways. Remove the comma
apply
Also
, one of the biggest advantage
of Change to a plural noun
advantages
this
place is the river, which led to the
Correct article usage
apply
sport
activities Change the noun form
sports
as
kayaking and swimming. Correct quantifier usage
such as
However
, there is environmental destruction as a result
of daily carbon dioxide emissions releasing
by a majority of cars.
Wrong verb form
released
In contrast
, location S2 would not be hot
point of the town as it is poorly populated. Add an article
a hot
Moreover
, it might be easily accessible for employees and families since surrounded by the railways and the main road. Although
this
position is not crowded, therefore
there would not be damage to ecology
. Another good reason is that the place is spacious and there would be possible to construct more facilities to attract visitors.
By comparing the sites, building the shopping mall in location A would be a profitable business with a huge income.Add an article
the ecology
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