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The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows two potential locations for a shopping mall in the city of Brandfield. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The represented diagram depicts a map with two potential locations for a proposed shopping mall for
inhabitants
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 of Brandfield.
On
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overall
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, it is significant to note that the first position might be between the housing estate and the city
center
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,
while
 the
second
 would be constructed on the south below the city
center
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. If the shopping plaza was located at S1, the site would be very attractive
due to
 a visited area by a great number of individuals
,
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 but would be too bustling because of railways.
Also
, one of the biggest
advantage
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 of
this
 place is the river, which led to
the
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sport
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 activities
as
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 kayaking and swimming.
However
, there is environmental destruction
as a result
 of daily carbon dioxide emissions
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 by a majority of cars.
In contrast
, location S2 would not be
hot
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 point of the town as it is poorly populated.
Moreover
, it might be easily accessible for employees and families since surrounded by the railways and the main road.
Although
this
 position is not crowded,
therefore
 there would not be damage to
ecology
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the ecology
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. Another good reason is that the place is spacious and there would be possible to construct more facilities to attract visitors. By comparing the sites, building the shopping mall in location A would be a profitable business with a huge income.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping mall
  • city center
  • suburbs
  • accessibility
  • public transportation
  • congestion
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • environmental considerations
  • infrastructure
  • urban planning
  • development
  • consumer behavior
  • green spaces
  • residential area
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