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Travelling abroad is a common trend nowadays for different reasons.This essay will discuss two main reasons for this cause and point out the negative impacts that would have on Society.

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, most of the countries on
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 planet are underdeveloped and the government fails to create enough jobs for its people, and people struggle for a living.
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, Habitats of
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 countries relocate to developed nations in search of a better lifestyle
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 A recent survey by the Time India showed, in the year 2015, many African people who could not afford basic needs
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 as food, shelter and water in their home country travelled to Kuwait and Dubai.
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, many youngsters
travel
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 to other nations for the various facilities a nation offers for its residents.
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, Australia and Canada invite around fifty thousand immigrants every year and offer free education and medical care for its citizens.
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, Kuwait supplies free food for the green collar jobs. For these reasons, people
travel
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 to different countries in order to make their ends meet.
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, there could be many negative impacts on the society. When a considerable number of people
travel
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 to different nations, communities would have lesser young work force, which is used to drive the nation. The county would suffer economically and financially. A recent survey of Times India showed that Bangladesh had had to borrow hefty amount from the world bank to take care of their older people because the nation could not perform well financially. In conclusion, people
travel
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 to developing nations for reasons
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 as, to improvise their lifestyle and for various benefits other country provides.
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, it could make undeveloped countries prone to serious problems..
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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