The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.
The graph illustrates the mean
temperatures
per month and the tables shows
the average annual number of hours of sunshine for three cities (Correct subject-verb agreement
show
London
, New York
, Sydney
).
Correct word choice
and Sydney
Overall
, it is clear that
while
London
and New York
experienced similar changes in the average monthly temperatures
, Sydney
experienced reverse
trend. Correct article usage
a reverse
Moreover
, from the table, it can be seen that while
the average yearly number of hours of sunshine in London
made up a minority, New York
and Sydney
had similar
share.
In terms of Add an article
a similar
temperatures
, both New York
and London
start the year with low temperature
(approximately 4.9 and 9.8 respectively). Fix the agreement mistake
temperatures
However
, in these cities, the temperatures
gradually increase, reaching the peak in July (30 in New York
and 24 in London
), but then
slowly decrease
, reaching the lowest Wrong verb form
decreasing
temperatures
in December (5 in New York
and 10 in London
). By contrast
, Sydney
had the reverse trend, starting with 25 in January, reaching its lowest temperature in July (15) and gradually rising over the rest months.
Moreover
, London
had the lowest annual hours of sunshine (1180), while
the figures for New York
and Sydney
show the
similar pattern (2535 and 2473 Correct article usage
a
accordingly
).Submitted by dunyasuleimanova123 on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words temperatures, london, york, sydney with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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