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Even though organic fruits and vegetables are more expensive than conventional fruits and vegetables, they are worth the extra cost. Do you agree or disagree.

#fruits #vegetables #cost
Organic fruits and vegetables are becoming more and more popular because they are healthier. Organic crops are grown without the application of chemical fertilizers and pesticides.
As a
result they
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result, they
 taste better and contain more nutrients.
Therefore
, I agree with the argument that organic foods their higher
price
 tags. To start with, the cultivation of organic crops requires more time and effort. Since
this
 kind of farming does not permit the use of synthetic fertilizers or pesticides, organic crops have increased risk of getting damaged by pests and weeds.
By contrast
, conventional farmers use chemical fertilizers and pesticides abundantly.
As a result
, they get much better yields and can sell their products at a low
price
. Since it is not easy to grow organic fruits and vegetables on a commercial basis, they are more expensive than regular crops.
However
, their quality justifies their higher
price
. Organic products are safe and healthy. Dangerous levels of pesticides are found in crops grown using the traditional method. People who consume
such
 foods on a prolonged basis have increased risk of developing health problems like cancer. It is true that pesticides increased
yield but
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yield, but
 they
also
 led to a variety of diseases.
As a
result there
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result, there
 is now growing awareness against the use of pesticides. Prevention is better than cure. By switching to organic foods people can reduce their risk for cancer and other diseases to a great extent.
In other words
, by spending a little bit more today, people can save much more on their hospital bills in the future. What’s more, if more people start using organic foods,
then
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than
 more farmers will adopt
this
 method of cultivation and prices will eventually come down. To conclude, the nutritional value and health benefits of organic foods completely justify their increased
price
. I hope the government will support organic crops and facilitate their commercial cultivation.
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