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In today’s society, both Western medicine and traditional complementary forms of medicines’ are now widely known and used. The effectiveness of these kinds of treatment is determined by the patient’s mental attitude towards it. To what extent you agree or disagree?

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In the modern era, Western medicine as well as alternative and conventional medicine have started to be used as widespread. The patient's emotional and mental behaviour towards various medical treatments is taken into account when evaluating the efficiency of these healing and reformative methods. In my opinion, in recent years the world has started to switch its direction from the Western style of medical treatments to former and traditional methods. The patient's mental reaction to medicine is equally important to its physical consequences. Alternative medication has become popular again in the
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 10 years. Some scientists argue that drugs which are mostly used in developed countries have some detrimental effects on human health. It is already known that they are merely reducing and curbing the symptoms but not healing the actual problem in the body.
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, in many Eastern countries alternative approaches are preferred over the other. There are several tests and researches conducted by scientists and researchers. One of them is no doubt observing the mental behaviour after the foundation of a new medical drug. Some might have a variety of side effects on human psychology.
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 impact cannot be clear until tests are carried out.
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, according to the Sunday Times, a well-renowned drug which has used for at least 50 years is proved to contribute problems with regard to the functioning of the brain. In conclusion, Western cure is slowly leaving its place to traditional ways. Experts are making observations and tests for new medicines in order to see if there are any negative effects.
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 focused on mental health. I believe that, the old methods are beneficial to our health. The most effective medicines are those who passed the experiments successfully.
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